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Notes on Revising Last Night's Dream - Ben Greenman

Notes on Revising Last Night's Dream

Talking parrot needs to lose Ricky Ricardo accent.

Old girlfriend who has moved on to date other men should not look so beautiful.

Replace man wearing black hat (trite!) with woman wearing red shoes (cinematic!).

Tibet has no stock-car racing.

Knife next to breakfast plate need not bloom into flowers.
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